Week 7 Story: Cindy goes to Juvie
Once upon a time, there was a very affluent man and wife who had a rather charming daughter named Cinderella. The wife became rather ill that winter and passed away from repeated drug use that stopped her heart. As Cinderella and her father carried her out into the storm to bury her under the willow tree, blood flowed from her eyes, staining the snow crimson.
Cinderella’s father began to weep. He told little Cindy “when you grow up, remember to stay out of trouble and allows follow the rules.” Cinderella pondered on these words for what seemed like thirty seconds and then shoved them to the back of her mind, forgetting them for all eternity.
Fast forward a few years, Cinderella’s father married a witch of a woman who had two gremlins for daughters. Cindy’s father grew fond of his stepdaughters for they were always following the rules unlike his own daughter who rebelled and got into any trouble she could find.
Helen and Helga the stepsisters were always asking Cindy “why do you dress in all black?” and “why are you always getting into trouble?” Cindy ignored them and could care less what they thought. She didn’t care about pretty dresses, makeup, and those social gatherings called balls. She believed wearing black fit her personality perfectly; dark, moody, and a little dead inside.
Eventually, the time came when the King invited all the maidens in the land to a ball. Helen and Helga were ecstatic. They put on stately dresses in reds, purples and golds, curled their hand, and adorned themselves in emeralds, rubies, and diamonds. Cindy was disgusted with their appearance and could care less. Of course, Cindy wasn’t allowed to go because she was grounded for putting frogs in her English teacher’s satchel at school the previous day.
After they left, Cindy went to the fireplace to play in the ashes, an activity she enjoyed being a less than girly girl. All of a sudden two black ravens swooped in down the chimney. They nodded their beaks and asked her, “Cindy do you want to go out and have some fun tonight?”
“Heck yes,” she answered.
The ravens were pleased she was on board. They told her how there was a black magic show happening in the forbidden forest tonight at 9 o’ clock.
“Oh my,” she replied, “what shall I wear to an event like that?”
The ravens told Cindy her outfit would be waiting on the place where her mother’s blood ran onto the snow that horrid winter night. The only condition was she had to be back by midnight.
Cindy went and found a black velvet gown and red heels to wear. Then as she looked to her left, waiting to take her into the forest was a black stagecoach with four horses in shades of ebony and white pulling up the front. The coach man, a headless horseman to be exact, escorted her into the coach and took her on the journey.
She arrived at the concert and was in pure heaven. All the evil creatures in the kingdom had flocked to see the dark magic performed tonight. She was having the time of her life watching magic potions being brewed, rats being turned into pumpkins, and dancing the night away. She was losing all aspects of time. When the clock struck midnight, Cindy knew she was in trouble. She had broken curfew.
Suddenly, flashing lights and sirens came blazing into the forest. The Fairytale Police Department was there to take her to juvie.
The officers bellowed “can someone direct me to a woman named Cinderella?’ “She has broken curfew and punishment must be served.”
Cindy was escorted to the police officers where they pushed her into the prison mobile. In such haste, Cindy’s scarlet heel was lost in the forest. Reaching the station, Cindy was thrown into a prison cell, cold and shoeless all for breaking her darn curfew.
Hours passed and her father arrived at the station for what she thought was to bail her out. He was alerted she was arrested when he was returned her red heel when her stepsisters found out where she had been. They were such tattle tales!
He said to Cindy, “I have forgiven you many times before for your bad behavior, but this time I won’t forgive you.” “I give up on you and I don’t love you anymore.”
With that he left Cindy to rot in her cell forever. Cindy was shocked, heartbroken, and downright angry. In spite of her stepsisters backstabbing scheme, Cindy summoned the ravens to peck the eyes out of every living family member in the kingdom.
The ravens swooped into her father’s home and pecked all their eyes out and stabbed them in the hearts with their pointed beaks. Their blood dripped down, staining the snow beneath them a crimson hue.
Cindy said, “If they don’t love me anymore, I don’t need them anyway.” With that, Cindy’s heart became hardened and bitter. Even to this day, she remains rotting in the juvie cell at the Fairytale Police Department.
Take notes kids, “don’t break the rules and don’t break curfew.”
Author's Note:
I took my inspiration for this twisted Cinderella story from the Brothers Grimm version. I chose to use this story because it was a bit more dark than the original French version most similar to Disney. I stuck with the same characters but I gave the stepsisters distinct names. I kept the beginning of the story the same, but I added my own original plot twist and dark details. I made Cinderella or "Cindy" go to a dark magic concert instead of meeting a prince at a ball because I felt this storyline fit better with her character personality. I hope y'all enjoy!
Bibliography:
Title: Cinderella
Author: The Brothers Grimm
Photo: Cinderella Mugshot
I really love how you made Cinderella out to be a rebel. I know in the original story of Cinderella she is an innocent girl who always obeys the rules and does whatever she is told. I think it was also funny how you made the stepsisters out to be goody girls because in the original story they are very mean and do not care about anyone. I also like the idea that ravens were the ones to show up because they are darker. I wonder why Cinderella only wanted to wear darker clothing. I am also curious how you got the idea of having ravens be the ones to give her the makeover and her gown. I think it would be interesting if you had Cinderella have a love interest in the story and that is why she snuck out at night. I think it could make the story very interesting.
ReplyDeleteHey Morgan, I really enjoyed reading your version of this classic story! I like how you changed the classic image of Cinderella into a troublemaker. I thought that was very creative and entertaining. I also thought that your story was well-planned and well-written. Overall I thought you did a great job and I cant wait to read more of your stories!
ReplyDeleteHey, Morgan! This was a good twist on the Cinderella story that is well-known today! The story and plot were planned out well and you put in effort to make the story unique. I like that you turned Cinderella into a rebel with a somewhat dark personality. The only thing I suggest is slowly proofreading your story; I noticed some grammatical and punctuation errors. Overall, the story is good!
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